S&M Haiku
I was IMing with a friend last night and we were tossing S&M themed haiku back and forth . He is of the opinion that the only correct format is the 3 line 5-7-5 format, the first line is five syllables, the second a total of seven syllables and the third five again. This format seriously limited my efforts at successful haiku.
wikiHow offers the following: “A haiku is an unrhyming verse genre, conveying an image or feeling in two parts spread over three lines, usually with a seasonal reference. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line, usually in fewer than seventeen syllables. It is a sort of urban myth that haiku in English should be 5-7-5 syllables.” AH HA! I knew I was needlessly hobbled in my efforts!
Well, purist or not, here is one from last night.
The crack of my whip,
your muffled cries sing to me,
you long for my touch.
Okay readers, I’m challenging you, share your S&M themed haiku. Jon suggested I make an contest of it, though I’m not certain what an appropriate prize will be, or how the challenge will be judged, but let’s see what happens.
Goodbye & Good Luck
© 2009, Dea. All rights reserved.
Posted: September 8th, 2009 under Uncategorized.
Tags: BDSM, Haiku
Comments
Comment from JO
Time September 9, 2009 at 1:37 am
the arc of my back
the leather sings thru the air
know my secret love
Comment from Lady HotchKiss
Time September 10, 2009 at 10:40 pm
What a great idea . . . will have to think of one!
Comment from Dea
Time September 11, 2009 at 4:35 am
Outstanding! LH, I look forward to your contribution.
Comment from Lady HotchKiss
Time September 11, 2009 at 5:45 pm
Sounds and heart pump’n
Finding your own space and time
Haecciety draws
This is for My boy, KnowmyPlace. He thinks that haecciety is the perfect word to describe subspace.
Haecciety: The aspect of existence on which individuality depends; the hereness and nowness of reality. http://fetlife.com/groups/6820/group_posts/296168
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Time September 15, 2009 at 2:41 pm
[...] Haikus Domina Dea is collecting S&M Haikus . . . what a novelty! Something fun, NEW, and interesting. I decided to write one for My boy. [...]
Comment from Nikita
Time September 16, 2009 at 2:34 pm
Fly by Hai
The leaves are falling slowly
Summer flew by much too fast
Ice will freeze and sheathe
Comment from Nikita
Time September 16, 2009 at 2:35 pm
I think I’ll do an S&M one now. *smerk* I’ve never been one to follow directions the first time.
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Time September 16, 2009 at 2:42 pm
[...] they had a grand old time teasing me about haikus. Domina Dea had posted a haiku challenge and encouraged me to post one too. I’m not a poetry kind of gal but I couldn’t [...]
Comment from Nikita
Time September 16, 2009 at 2:59 pm
Okay, here it is:
Offering
He gripped his ankles firmly
Uncut, thick, focused, filled, and fooled
Screaming that nothing was damaged.
Comment from just kickme
Time September 16, 2009 at 3:37 pm
Badly Beating Balls
Wicked Fists Knees Feet alike
He’s bruised and broken
Comment from knowmyplace
Time September 16, 2009 at 5:29 pm
Pain blooms in his eyes
Brought from within by Her whip
Slowly he forgets
Comment from Wolffie
Time September 16, 2009 at 6:30 pm
Ass, bare, upturned,
Inviting hot kisses and freezing whips
- hell freezes over.
Comment from Dea
Time September 16, 2009 at 7:05 pm
Squee! Wolfie, I adore it!
Comment from cynskasha
Time September 16, 2009 at 8:49 pm
Crop, Hand, Clothespin, Clamp
My Skin Raw my Body Damp
This is my Pleasure
Comment from jamieM
Time September 16, 2009 at 10:51 pm
The searing hot pain,
a shrill scream ripped from his throat,
love is submission.
Comment from theotherside
Time September 17, 2009 at 2:18 am
Make THEM write haiku
Who needs seasonal references
When you’ve got a whip?
(This haiku works in most British English accents. It may not work in all American ones…but “seasonal references” has 5 syllables when I say it)
Comment from pink_twitch
Time October 24, 2009 at 7:31 pm
One kissed one plugged,
Asses and lips in full conjunction,
How appropriate in the autumn sky!
thank You.
Comment from dandyhouseboy
Time September 8, 2009 at 3:12 pm
Kneeling, face down ground.
Heeled Beauty circling
Scars of shame delight